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A wise man once said...
Fading in from the abyss,
'Write words... Find beauty.'
Everything here,
Has such eternal power,
We are all forlorn...
Lost forevermore,
Into the eternal night,
Never to return...
I thought you could sail,
Turns out it was just a dream,
In the lonely dark...
Nothing protects me,
Not from you, or anything,
I refuse to cry...
Fingers rake across
Simple hollow black keyboards,
One down, many left...
Foolish Cheshire smile,
Hiding nothing, but a mask,
Save for the poor fools...
Negativity;
Say whatever you want to,
You'll never stop me...
I want to say thanks,
You are always there for me,
A smile, shines with hope.
Fading in from the abyss,
'Write words... Find beauty.'
Everything here,
Has such eternal power,
We are all forlorn...
Lost forevermore,
Into the eternal night,
Never to return...
I thought you could sail,
Turns out it was just a dream,
In the lonely dark...
Nothing protects me,
Not from you, or anything,
I refuse to cry...
Fingers rake across
Simple hollow black keyboards,
One down, many left...
Foolish Cheshire smile,
Hiding nothing, but a mask,
Save for the poor fools...
Negativity;
Say whatever you want to,
You'll never stop me...
I want to say thanks,
You are always there for me,
A smile, shines with hope.
I've been working on these for a while. And I thought I'd go ahead and submit them, since today is Haiku Poetry Day. 
And I love a good Haiku. But I feel like I would spam the heck out of my watchers if I submitted each one separately, so I don't want to do that. I feel like all of these sort of relate to one another and tie in together anyway, but they can also be enjoyed separately. Hope you like. 
Feel free to interpret in your own unique way, you beautiful people. c:
And I love a good Haiku. But I feel like I would spam the heck out of my watchers if I submitted each one separately, so I don't want to do that. I feel like all of these sort of relate to one another and tie in together anyway, but they can also be enjoyed separately. Hope you like. Feel free to interpret in your own unique way, you beautiful people. c: Comments9
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Definitely lovely for the most part! I like the line "Everything here, Has such eternal power" it is ironic that the line has the word "power" in it because I think that line has power to it, power to inspire!!! But some critiques would be that in the stanzas you have some commas that should probably be a period and then starting a new sentence, or a semi colon. And I think some of the imagery you presented in the stanzas may be a little too cliche. I think you could have tried harder. But I am not so experienced with Haiku, so maybe I could be unfair. But I think this poem is still pretty to read, and in some way the imagery has a simplistic and sincere quality to it. I also think it feels refreshing too in a way. So nice one, friend!!