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I still can't get my mind off it,
The sick look of twisted horror on their faces,
As knives carved through flesh
And we were told...
It's all an experiment.
It will be okay.
Go to sleep.
Yeah...
Right.
How I long to have escaped...
To that same golden boy,
The one who keeps his aftershave by the door,
Who holds me just right,
Satisfying my cravings for skin on skin...
It is too cold.
Well I'm sorry...
That was a loadbearing heart,
And you've crushed it with your words,
Cruel and quick, cutting to the core.
Just look at you, lovelorn and betrayed,
You are surely no better than
The pharoahs that you mock.
Shhh...
Sleep, my little one.
For you know not what you do...
The sick look of twisted horror on their faces,
As knives carved through flesh
And we were told...
It's all an experiment.
It will be okay.
Go to sleep.
Yeah...
Right.
How I long to have escaped...
To that same golden boy,
The one who keeps his aftershave by the door,
Who holds me just right,
Satisfying my cravings for skin on skin...
It is too cold.
Well I'm sorry...
That was a loadbearing heart,
And you've crushed it with your words,
Cruel and quick, cutting to the core.
Just look at you, lovelorn and betrayed,
You are surely no better than
The pharoahs that you mock.
Shhh...
Sleep, my little one.
For you know not what you do...
Just about things, idk I guess I don't like giving too much away. Sometimes I feel my poetry already gives too much away, but at the same time, I know it's not enough...
It's basically about being in love with someone and being afraid to talk to them. And being betrayed by yourself, basically. Something like that... I don't know if the point is that clear, but then again, I don't know if I want it to be that clear.
It's basically about being in love with someone and being afraid to talk to them. And being betrayed by yourself, basically. Something like that... I don't know if the point is that clear, but then again, I don't know if I want it to be that clear.
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Well, I'd say that the point is kinda not clear; I felt like there was not really anything I could grab onto or connect with. I would say though that your word choices were pretty, and so was the emotion expressed in it. This is just my opinion, but you should be careful that not EVERYTHING in your writing is hard to understand; of course it's good to have some lines that are kind of a mystery, but through this whole poem, I had no idea what was going on. But maybe it's just me; maybe other people can understand. So, those are just my thoughts on this, my friend!